Who-my classmates
What their name-Summer and Kim
What they like-shopping
How their personality-talkative
What event-go shopping together
What happened-walk into a clothing store, the clerk can' t recognize them
How they felt-embarrassed
What the result- at last the clerk can recognize them
Never go shopping together
Topic Sentence: Summer and Kin are my classmates and they are alike. They are always be regarded as the each other when they are together.
Summer and Kim are my classmates and they like to go shopping. They are also talkative. One day Summer was bored and he wanted to hang out with someone. He called Kim and they decided to go shopping together. They walked into the clothing store. Summer browsed for a while and he picked out some clothes that he liked. He asked the clerk to find the size that he would fit. After a minute, the clerk brought back the correct clothes but gave them to Kim. Kim felt confused and so did the clerk. When the clerk realized he has confused Summer with Kim and Kim with Summer, he apologized to them incessantly.
Summer and Kim could not believe what just happened and they felt embarrassed. They talked about what parts of their face are similar on the way home. They argued the matter for an hour, because they did not think they look alike. At last they decided they would never go shopping together.
1 comment:
I think you did it very well. Although there are a few mistakes, some extra sentences and a few words are spelled in the wrong way.Take "They are also talkative."for example. It doesn't mentioned in the following articles, so I suggest you just delete it. And also, I think miscalculate is better than confuse while you use it in this sentence: When the clerk realized he has confused Summer with Kim and Kim with Summer, he apologized to them incessantly. I think confused is mostly used in describing things make somebody feel something; however, this condition is much alike the clerk couldn't identify them. Therefore, I think miscalculate is better than confuse. As what I said at first, I think you had done it well. If you could use some correct words, it must help your articles become much more proffessional.
By Kingsley
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